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Band 7

A friend from another country is moving to your city for work. He / she has asked you for advice about living in your city. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • suggest an interesting part of the city to live in • describe the public transport in your city • say how your friend can meet new people there

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Dear Ali, I'm writing to let you know more about my
city
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's traditions, customs, cultural background, public services, and the costs of living in my
city
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. One of the interesting parts of the
city
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 to live in is the northern part, where you can reach the Eynali Mountains within minutes, and explore the natural beauty of the mountains
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 enjoying fresh air and the pleasant weather. The costs of renting homes
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also are
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 reasonable in the area, which enables you to rent a relatively large flat.
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, the public transport in my
city
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 is completely efficient, allowing you to use various forms of public transport systems, including environmentally friendly buses, underground trains, and taxis for your daily commuting. You can
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 travel by train, aeroplane, or luxury bus
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to travel
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 across the country or to international destinations. To meet new people in my
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, you can go to the cafes, which feature traditional and modern aspects.
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, I recommend that you join a local club, where you can socialise more conveniently with others and spend quality time with your family. I hope
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 information helps you have a comfortable life in my country. Please don't hesitate if you need
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 details. Take care, Mohammadreza

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task response
Answer the city part, travel, and meeting people well. Add one or two more clear facts, such as the name of a bus line or a club, to make your help more useful.
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Keep the letter more personal. Say why this area may suit Ali’s work or daily life.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a clear order. Use simple links such as “Also”, “For example”, and “Because of this” to join ideas more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point. The first line lists many topics, but the letter does not talk about all of them, so make it shorter and more direct.
coherence and cohesion
Add a full stop after “taxis” before starting “For your daily commuting.”
task response
You cover all three parts of the task: a place to live, public travel, and ways to meet people.
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The advice about the northern part is clear and helpful, with nature, fresh air, and lower home costs.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear opening, body paragraphs, and a friendly closing.
coherence and cohesion
The words “Moreover” and “However” help the reader follow your ideas.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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