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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
There is no denying the fact that learning languages is a very important thing.
Body paragraph 1
While
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 it is a commonly held belief that being in a
country
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 where you have to speak a foreign
language
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 may cause serious problems, there is
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 an argument that opposes it.
Body paragraph 2
In my opinion, I consider that being in a foreign
country
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 is a good opportunity to acquire and learn a
language
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.
Body paragraph 3
To begin
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 with, a person desiring to learn a new
language
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 always needs motivation.
In other words
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,
your
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you
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 need to deal with people in that
country
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's
language
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.
In addition
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, as we always
say
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say,
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 " necessity is the mother of invention".
For example
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, if you are hungry and you go to a restaurant to eat, you will search on the internet how you can say
learn
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apply
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"I am hungry" in
this
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language
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 and,
as a result
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, you will learn a new
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sentence
 in
this
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 situation.
Body paragraph 4
Another point to consider, when you learn a foreign
country
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's
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language
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language,
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 it will allow you to learn more about the traditions in that
country
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. It is
also
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 possible to say that, in every situation,
you
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when you
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 try to learn a new word
it
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, it
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 will teach you a new thing about that
country
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.
Moreover
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, learning
host
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the host
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country
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's
language
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 will help you behave better in that
country
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.
For instance
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, if you are abroad and try to talk to people there, they will be friendly with you, especially when they see you are trying to speak their
language
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Conclusion
In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that staying in a foreign
country
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 is a great opportunity to learn its
language
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, and
this
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 will be a way to strengthen relationships between
who
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those who
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 have various nationalities.

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task response
State your view more directly in the first paragraph. Then answer both parts of the topic: social problems and daily problems. Your essay mainly says that learning the local language is good, but it does not fully explain why the problems may not be serious.
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Add clear main ideas about daily life, such as work, school, health care, travel, and buying food. Also add social ideas, such as making friends, feeling alone, and joining local life.
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Develop each point with a full reason and a clear example. The restaurant example is useful, but it is small. Add an example of a person who cannot speak well at work or at a doctor’s office, then explain how learning the language can help.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two body paragraphs, and an end. Keep this shape, but make the link to the topic stronger in every paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body paragraph begin with one clear main idea. For example, one paragraph can be about daily problems, and the next can be about social life. This will make your view easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care. Words such as “For example”, “In addition”, and “Moreover” are used well, but some sentences do not connect smoothly. Explain how one sentence leads to the next.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid repeating “learn a language” and “foreign country” too often. Use simple other words, such as “the local language”, “living abroad”, or “the host country”.
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You give a clear overall view: living abroad can help people learn the local language.
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You use relevant examples from daily life, such as ordering food and talking to local people.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
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You use basic linking words to guide the reader through your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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