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The shown bar chart provides data on the total quantity of minutes of telephone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002. The calls are divided into three categories and are denoted in billions.

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The shown bar chart provides data on the total quantity of minutes of telephone calls in the United Kingdom between 1995 and 2002. The calls are divided into three categories and are denoted in billions.
The
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 graph provides information about the
minutes
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 of telephone calls in the UK during the period from 1995 to 2002.
Overall
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, these
minutes
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 exhibited different trends over the given period;
for instance
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, the local-fixed
line
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 increased
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then
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and then
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 decreased,
whereas
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 the national
line
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 recorded a gradual rising trajectory.
However
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, the trend for each type varied slightly. As the chart illustrates, the local-fixed
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 started as the highest figure, standing at around 71
minutes
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,
while
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 it rose to
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peak
 at 90
minutes
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 in 1999, before returning to 71 by the end of the period. The international-fixed
line
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 came next at nearly 38
minutes
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, after which it experienced a cumulative
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 to 61
minutes
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 within seven years.
On the other hand
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, all
calls type
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call types
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 commenced at roughly 5
minutes
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 as the lowest number, whilst it witnessed a slow growth until 2001, reaching approximately 48
minutes
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 with a late decline to 45
minutes
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 in 2002.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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