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the graph show the map of islip center. describe it

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the graph show the map of islip center. describe it
The maps illustrate the changes that will take place in
Islip
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the Islip
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 town centre between
the
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apply
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now and the future.
This
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 report aims to summarise the key trends,significant comparisons and notable changes highlighted in the data.
Overall
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,the
area
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 will undergo several significant changes.Some
exiting
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existing
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 features will be removed or replaced,
while
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 new facilities will be added.
In addition
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,the
latout
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layout
 of the
area
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 will become more modern. Looking first at the northern part of the
area
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,the countryside is currently located there .
However
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,it will be converted into
dual
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a dual
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 carriageway in the future.Meanwhile,the shops will
remaind
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remain
 in the same location,
although
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 the main road will be replaced by
pedestriaans
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pedestrians
 only.
Furthermore
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,a bus station,shopping centre,and car park will be added. Moving to the opposite part of
te
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the
area
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 ,new housing will be built .
Furthermore
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,the park will be reduced in size.Another
noiceable
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noticeable
 change is that the dual carriageway will be added.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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