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Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -describe where you lived when you were a student at the university -recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation -warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation

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Dear Ali, I’m writing to let you know about the place I was living when I studied at the
university
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, where you want to participate in a course. I would
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 provide you with some practical advice regarding finding the best place to live. I vividly remember that I live in a small, but spacious flat, which the
university
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 offered me on the main street. The flat location gave me access to a wide range of services, including public transport, a healthcare centre, and a big mall, where I could purchase what I needed.
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, I paid every month 150$, but the price didn’t include utility costs. I would suggest that you consult with the
university
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 students’ service because they can provide you with numerous types of accommodations at affordable prices.
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, you can search
affordable
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for affordable
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 homes on Divar, an application that offers many choices based on your
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 and budget.
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, I think the
university
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 students’ service is the best option. I would recommend that you don’t choose flats located in the city centre, as the location is really crowded, especially during peak times, and you may be faced with crowded public transport during your daily commuting. I hope that the information helps you find the best place. If you need
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 information, don’t hesitate to contact me. Take care, Mohammadreza

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task response
Answer all three parts well, but give a little more detail about how to choose a safe and good flat. For example, say to visit the flat before paying money.
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Use the same time form when you talk about your student life. Write “I lived” instead of “I live.”
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear start, middle, and end. To make it flow better, link the last warning more clearly to finding a home.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph on one main point. Your first main paragraph is about your old flat, which is good; you can make it stronger by putting the cost at the end.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words such as “also,” “so,” and “because” to join ideas in a more natural way.
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You give useful facts about your old flat, where it was, what was near it, and how much it cost.
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You give clear advice about where to look for a home and warn your friend about busy city-centre areas.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is easy to follow, with one paragraph for your flat, one for how to look, and one for a warning.
coherence and cohesion
The greeting and closing are friendly and right for a letter to a friend.
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