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the graph below shows the average CO2 emissions per person in 4 countries from 1967 to 2007

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the graph below shows the average CO2 emissions per person in 4 countries from 1967 to 2007
The line graph compares average
carbon
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 dioxide
emissions
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 per
person
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 across four countries from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the amount of
carbon
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 dioxide released in the United Kingdom and
Sweden
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 declined noticeably by the end of the period,
while
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 the figures for Italy and Portugal increased gradually over time. The UK recorded the largest amount of
carbon
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emissions
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 released both at the start and end of the period. Another notable feature is that the lowest figures
at the end
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 of the period emerged in
Sweden
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 and Portugal. The average amount of
carbon
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 dioxide released in the UK stood at nearly 11
tonnes
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 per
person
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 in 1967, after which it declined gradually to reach approximately 9
tonnes
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 per
person
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 in 2007. The output of
carbon
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emissions
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 in
Sweden
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, which began at around 9
tonnes
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 per
person
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 in 1967, peaked at just over 10
tonnes
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 in 1977. It
then
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 fell dramatically to roughly 5
tonnes
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 in 2007. Turning to the remaining countries, the level of CO₂
emissions
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 in Italy started around 4
tonnes
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 per
person
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 in 1967, after overtaking
Sweden
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 in 1987 at around 7
tonnes
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.
Following
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this
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, it rose noticeably to roughly 8
tonnes
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 in 2007.
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, Portugal, which recorded nearly 1 tonne of
carbon
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emissions
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 in 1967, grew significantly to a high of approximately 5
tonnes
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 per
person
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 in 2007.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, emissions, person, sweden, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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