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The map given below shows the plan for reconstruction of the second floor of Mason's Building. Summarize.

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The map given below shows the plan for reconstruction of the second floor of Mason's Building. Summarize.
The pie charts provide key information about the plan
of
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for
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 rebuilding the second floor of Mason's Building in China. The units are measured in percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the pie charts that the
food
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 had the largest
shares
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 in both years.
In addition
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, the clothing and
Food
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items
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 showed a slight decrease,
whereas
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 both Household goods and Medicine
items
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shares
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share
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 have increased.
According to
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 what is shown from the pie charts,
In
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in
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 1995, the
food
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 section
has
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 the largest
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shares
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share
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 across the other
items
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, which accounted for
a two-third
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two-thirds of the
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shares
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.
In addition
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, Medicine
items
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was
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were
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 the second largest
shares
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 by around a fifth,
whereas
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 both Household goods and Clothing had the lowest percentages, with 9% and 4% respectively. In terms of
the
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apply
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2011
year
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, the
Food
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 and Clothing
despite
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sectors, despite
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the
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a
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 slight decrease, they are still
scoored
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scored
 the largest
shares
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 by 59% and 18% respectively. The Household goods and
Medecine
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Medicine
 are almost the same recoreded a tenth
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shares
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share
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,
whereas
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 the Clothing had a
slighy
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slight
 decrease by 1 per cent.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, shares, items with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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