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the graph below show the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country betweeb 2011 and 2018

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the graph below show the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country betweeb 2011 and 2018
The line graph provides key information about the
number
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 of stores that opened and closed in one country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the
number
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 of both closed and opened stores
have
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has
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 reduced
at the end
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.
In addition
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, the closed shops scored the
lowst
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lowest
point
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,
whereas
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 the
opened
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open
 stores achieved the highest
point
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.
According to
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 what is shown, the
number
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 of
the closures store
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store closures
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 at the initial
point
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 is around 6,000, and it showed a slight decline in 2012 by 6,000
closures store
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store closures
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, followed by a significant decrease in 2015 by just below one thousand.
Moreover
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, the
ternd
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trend
 experienced a sharp increase in 2016, followed by a constant
number
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 of
closures shop
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shop closures
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. In terms of the
number
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 of
the openings store
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store openings
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, the
staring
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starting
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point
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 was the highest
number
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 across the two lines, achieving approximately 8,500.
However
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, it followed with a sharp decline in 2012 by just below 4,000,
then
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 reached just over 6,000 in 2014,
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finally
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and finally
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 the trend continued to decrease till the end by 3,000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, point with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just below" was used 2 times.
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