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Should the weekly working days be reduced and weekends extended? Give your opinion.

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Introduction
On the issue whether the amount of weekly
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 days should be reduced and
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weekends
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 should be extended, I entirely agree.
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 politicians fear for productivity and economic stability, research has proven that
employees
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 with sufficient rest on the
weekends
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 are both more productive and more content.
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 has a measurable on the mental and physical
health
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 of
workers
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, and
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 affects the number of people requiring medical leave.
Body paragraph 1
Recent studies have shown the effects of stress on the human brain. Prolonged periods of heightened anxiety can lead to symptoms resembling depression and insomnia.
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 can negatively influence the quality of
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 and lead to potentially disastrous consequences.
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 slightly cliche, the image of a surgeon being distracted during brain surgery is terrifying to most people,
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 it serving as the plot of several episodes of medical TV dramas
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 as Grey’s Anatomy.
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 the fictional consequences seem overly dramatic, the reality can look surprisingly similar.
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 includes malpractice suits, terminations of
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 contracts or even lethal mistakes. These increased risks are another strain on the mental
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 of
employees
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 and form a vicious cycle, potentially ending in burnout and long term loss of employment.
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 will result in an increased demand for
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 insurance payouts, which will in turn be noticeable in higher taxes.
Body paragraph 2
Physically, stress can affect virtually any part of the human body negatively. Apart from illnesses that are classified as psychosomatic, a high-stress environment can result in increased wear and tear on the body. Especially in rapidly paced, physically demanding jobs
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 as construction
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, the
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 need sufficient rest for their bodies to recuperate.
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 an increased risk of injury is evident from the
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 and safety authority’s annual reports. Here it states that muscle strains, injuries acquired
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 overuse and fatigue were among the most common reasons given for
workers
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 who had to call in sick to
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 over the
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 five years. These injuries are likely to lead to an early retirement
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 being unfit for
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 physical labour.
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 will result in a lack of labour available and a longer period of receiving state pensions,
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 damaging the economy in the long term.
Body paragraph 3
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, a 2024 study from comparing Norway, Denmark and Germany exhibits the positive effect of longer
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 in a pilot programme in three cities in the respective countries. The
workers
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 report positive effects on mental and physical
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,
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overall
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 motivation and contentment. Curiously, the companies involved show no decrease in productivity. The Danish insurance company even exhibited a slight increase in cases completed. Their internal survey on employee satisfaction supported the claims on the official study.
Conclusion
In conclusion, the mental and physical
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 of
employees
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 is paramount to ensure economic success and to reduce strain on society by limiting social benefits required. The sustained
health
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 of
workers
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 is affected by sufficient rest and
therefore
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 by longer periods of leisure.
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,
weekends
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 should be extended.

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task response
Your view is clear from the start and stays the same. To make it stronger, explain more directly why fewer work days can keep work output high, not only why stress is bad.
task response
Some examples are too far from the main point. The part about TV drama takes space but does not add much proof. Use that space for a real work or business example instead.
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Be careful with facts about studies, reports, and tax costs. If you cannot fully prove them, use softer words such as “may”, “can”, or “for example”.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear order: mind health, body health, then a study. This is easy to follow. Make the link to shorter work weeks clear at the start of each body part.
coherence and cohesion
Some parts are very long and have many ideas in one flow. Split long parts into shorter ones, and give each part one main point.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links to show cause and result, such as “because of this”, “as a result”, and “for this reason”. This will make the move from stress to work, health, and the economy more clear.
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You answer the question fully and give a firm opinion. Your main idea is clear: more rest can help workers and the wider economy.
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You give more than one reason for your view, including mind health, body health, work safety, and work output.
coherence and cohesion
The opening gives the main view, and the final part returns to it. This gives the essay a clear shape.
coherence and cohesion
Each main body part has its own focus, and the last body part gives a useful point in support of your view.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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