The chart below shows the amount of aid ($ billions) that six developed countries gave to developing countries from 2008 to 2010.

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The bar chart illustrates the
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of cash in billions of
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that six advanced countries provided to developing nations from 2008 to 2010.
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, the most dominating and developed country which gave the highest chunk of
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was the USA in 2010,
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others were almost in the same figures , except Sweden, with its lowest given
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number in 2008. The highest spot had the USA with its given
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of around 24
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in 2010. In 2008, the
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of
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given by developed countries was significantly lower than in 2010, standing at around 21
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dollars
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and had an even lower figure in 2009 , which was about 18
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dollars
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. Germany had given a noticeably lower
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of care, which was about 9
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,
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in other years it remained almost the same , with a mere increase. UK and Japan were almost in the same positions
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they both gave the same
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of
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, approximately 7
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dollars
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,
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in other years had a minor rise. The Netherlands and Sweden had the lowest numbers throughout the period, being between 4
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dollars
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and 5
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dollars
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