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the maps below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan fr changes to the school site in 2024

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the maps below show the site of a school in 2004 and the plan fr changes to the school site in 2024
The map illustrates the
changes
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 that took place in the territory between 2004 and 2024 , including the construction of a new
school
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 building and an increase in the
number
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 of students.
Overall
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 ,
in
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from
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 2004 to
2024
Punctuation problem
2024,
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 the
school
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site
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 underwent significant
changes
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 , the
number
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 of students increased from 600 to 1000 , a new
school
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 building was constructed
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and
second
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a second
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 car park was added .
However
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 ,
Sports
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the sports
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 field was relocated from other side and
redevelopment
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the redevelopment
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 of part of the
site
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. In 2004 ,the
school
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site
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 consisted of two
school
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building
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buildings
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. The car park was located near the main entrance ,on the western side of the
site
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 . A path ran between the two
school
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 buildings and the sports field
stated
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stood
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 in the north-eastern part of the area .
Moreover
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 , the
site
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 was surrounded by a large
number
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 of trees. By 2024 , several significant
changes
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 had been made to the
school
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site
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 . First , a third
school
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 building was constructed in the north-eastern part of the
site
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. In
additional
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addition
, a second car park was added
on
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in
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 the eastern area ,
while
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 the sports field was relocated to the south-eastern area. The road was extended, and the path modified between the
school
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 buildings. These
changes
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 accommodated the
increase
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increasing
number
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 of students from 600 to 1000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words changes, school, number, site with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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