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A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called 'The book that influenced me most’. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter, describe what this book was about explain how this book influenced you say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to bring to your attention the
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 that has had a positive impact on my personal and professional development. The
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 is Overcome Your Fears, written by Ali Amadi and published by Green
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 organisation. It involves inspiring information that encourages readers to improve their essential skills, including
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 critical thinking, resilience, patience, and creativity. These skills can help people overcome their challenges and pursue their goals. The
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 has helped me critically evaluate conditions and pursue my goals with higher motivation. I
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 learned how to think efficiently and develop my ideas.
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, I learned that success is the game of sacrifice, hard work, and practice, which has played an important role in my personal and professional growth. I firmly believe that the
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 can heavily influence people, particularly younger generations, to seek their goals without fearing losing.
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 can motivate them to take risks and gain real-life experience, which can support their personal, educational, and professional development in their future lives. Thank you for your time and consideration. Yours faithfully, Mohammadreza Hadavi Bavil

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Say a little more about the book’s main story or main ideas. One clear example from the book would make your letter more real and personal.
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Explain more clearly how one idea from the book changed something you did at work or in daily life.
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Your ideas are in a clear order. To make the links smoother, use simple words such as “For example”, “Because of this”, and “As a result” when you move from one idea to the next.
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The last body paragraph is clear, but you could add one short example of how a young person may use the book’s ideas.
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You answer all parts of the letter: you describe the book, say how it helped you, and explain how it may help other people.
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Your tone is polite and right for a letter to a magazine editor.
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The letter has a clear opening, three body paragraphs, and a polite ending.
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Each paragraph has one main point, so the reader can follow your ideas easily.
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