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📊 The bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emissions in different countries in three different years.

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📊 The bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emissions in different countries in three different years.
The given bar chart illustrates the quantity of carbon emissions in various countries in three different years – 1975, 1990 and 2005. ​
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, the USA and China witnessed
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trends
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 in carbon
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emissions
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. Meanwhile, the
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 for Canada and India increased slightly.
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, Germany and the United Kingdom witnessed a mild decline during the period. ​In 1975, usage of carbon
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 in the USA accounted for the highest amount at 1,200,000
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, before increasing to 1,600,000
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 in 2005.
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, the
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 for the USA was highest at 1,600,000
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 compared to other countries during three years period.
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, the
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 for China rose dramatically to almost 1,550,000
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 in 2005 from its initial 300,000
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 in 1975. ​In more detail, Canada saw a mild growth from roughly 100,000
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 to 170,000
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 between 1975 and 2005. At the same time, there was a significant increase from 260,000
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 to 500,000
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 in India from 1975 to 2005.
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, the United Kingdom was just under 200,000
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 in 1975. ​It
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 saw a slight fluctuation between 170,000
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 and 180,000
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 from 1990 to 2005. The
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 for Germany registered over 280,000
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 in 1975
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then
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 it remained unchanged for 15 years, before decreasing to 200,000
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 in the final year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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