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THE TABLE AND PIE CHART ILLUSTRATE POPULATIONS IN AUSTRALIA ACCORDING TO DIFFERENT NATIONALITIES AND AREAS.

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THE TABLE AND PIE CHART ILLUSTRATE POPULATIONS IN AUSTRALIA ACCORDING TO DIFFERENT NATIONALITIES AND AREAS.
The pie chart and table show the percentages of the
Australian
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population
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 based on their nationalities and regions.
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, the majority of the
Australian
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population
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are
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 native,
while
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 most of them live in urban
areas
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. As can be seen on the pie chart, around two-thirds of the
Australian
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population
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 are locals, making them the majority. Compared to that figure, only 7% of British citizens live in Australia,
while
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 other nationalities,
such
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 as New Zealanders, Chinese, and Dutch,
are accounting
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 for less than 3%, and the rest
is the
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 other nationalities. Moving on to the table, more than 80% of the
Australian
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population
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 are city residents,
while
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 the rest of them reside in rural
areas
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. Even though the percentages of the
population
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 of British and New Zealanders are quite low, most of them inhabit urban
areas
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, recorded at around 90%. It is
also
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 worth mentioning that almost 100% of
Chinese
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 settle in cities.
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, only around 80% of Australians and
Dutch
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the Dutch
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 live in urban
areas
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, population, areas with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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