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Some people argue that the primary purpose of natural resources, such as forests and rivers, is to support human development and economic growth. Others believe that it is essential to protect the natural environment and its wildlife, even if it restricts human activity and progress. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
Nowadays, the most popular concept is trying to save and protect the environment and to
sustainable
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promote sustainable
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 forestry for both human benefits from wood and land, and trying not to hurt the planet.
Conversly
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Conversely
, some people
believes
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believe
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 that the purpose of having forests and rivers is to support human
live
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life
 and economic growth. In my opinion, I agree with the first choice where we have to raise and increase the awareness of protecting the
wildlife
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 and the
enviromental
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environmental
 life to live in a healthy planet.
Body paragraph 1
There are several advantages of protecting the natural environment and its
wildlife
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 for human beings and the
wild life
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wildlife
 animals as well. The first
advatage
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advantage
 states that protecting the
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enviroment
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environment
 helps animals to have a good
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enviroment
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environment
 to live in and to grow in the future
peacfully
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peacefully
. The second advatage appoints that it will be
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beneficial
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human
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humans
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 since it will help them live in a healthy
enviroment
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 with out chemical materials and with clean and fresh air.
Body paragraph 2
In
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 the left hand, we can state some disadvatages
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 as for
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farmers,
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 they would have
a
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apply
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less space
to
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for
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 farming.
In addition
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, the land owners may have some struggles
of
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with
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 having
a
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clean and no-trees lands for building and
devloping
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developing
 buildings and towers.
Conclusion
In conclusion, protecting the
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enviroment
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environment
 and the natural
wildlife
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 would be
benefit
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beneficial
 in multiple ways
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such
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 as helping
wildlife
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 animals to grow and live in a clean and
helthy lifstyle
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healthy lifestyle
, and it will benefit
the
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human beings by enabling them to live in a healthy
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enviroment
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environment
.
Conversly
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Conversely
, there are some
disadvatages
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disadvantages
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 as having less farming
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 and having less
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land
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 for owners.

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task response
Discuss both views in equal detail. Explain why some people want forests and rivers for jobs, homes, food, and money. Then explain why others want strong protection for animals, water, and air.
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Make your own view clear from the start and keep it clear. You support protection, but you can also say that people may use nature in careful ways.
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Give real, clear examples. For example, a forest can give wood and farm land, but it also gives homes to animals and helps keep rivers clean.
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Develop each main point. Do not only say that protection is good; explain how it helps people and animals over time.
coherence and cohesion
Use a clear four-part plan: introduction, one paragraph for human use, one paragraph for protection, and a conclusion with your view.
coherence and cohesion
Your second body paragraph should focus on the other view, not only on its bad points. Start with a clear topic sentence such as: "People who support use of natural land believe it can improve life and the economy."
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words correctly: "First," "Also," "However," "For example," and "In conclusion." Avoid unclear phrases such as "In the left hand." Use "On the other hand" instead.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one idea in each sentence. Some sentences are long and hard to follow. Shorter sentences will make your meaning clearer.
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You give a clear personal view that protecting nature is important.
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You include points about both people and animals, such as clean air, healthy land, farming, and building.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You try to show contrast between the two views with words such as "Conversely" and "In addition."
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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