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The chart below gives information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008.

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The chart below gives information about the level of education of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008.
The graph illustrates the level of
education
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 of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country in 2002, 2006 and 2008.
This
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 report aims to summarise the key trends, significant comparisons and notable changes highlighted in the data.
Overall
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, it is evident that secondary
education
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 in 2002 experienced a marked increase, with the highest value represented in
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secondary
education
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,
while
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 higher
education
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 represents the smallest. Another notable trend is that primary and lower
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 and higher
education
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 in 2006
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which have
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 almost identical percentages.
Initially
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, secondary
education
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 in 2002 accounted for 65%, making it the highest among all categories.
This
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 is followed by secondary
education
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 in 2006, which represents approximately 61%, significantly lower than the largest category.
In contrast
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, the contribution of higher
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 in 2008
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 relatively insignificant, with a percentage of only 9%.
Furthermore
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, a noticeable trend is the uniformity between primary and lower
education
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 and higher
education
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 in 2006, which both show similar growth patterns over the period.
To sum up
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, the data highlighted the level of
education
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 of Bulgarian people who wanted to go and live in another country, with the most significant features standing out.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emigration
  • tertiary education
  • secondary education
  • primary education
  • trend
  • intentions
  • emigrate
  • demographics
  • percentages
  • fluctuation
  • statistics
  • depict
  • overseas
  • significant
  • increase/decrease
  • pattern
  • move abroad
  • educational attainment
  • time frame
  • compare
  • contrast
  • analyze
  • summarize
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