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The plans below show the South Wing of Walton Museum in 2008 and in 2012 after it was developed. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons relevant.

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Introduction
The plans illustrate the development of the South Wing of Walton
Museum
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 in two years before and after, in 2008 and 2012.
Body paragraph 1
It is clear from the maps that the
museum
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 undergo into a significant development. There are more facilities, and became bigger than the old architecture.
In addition
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, in the
past
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 there were only two floors ,
whereas
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 after the redevelopment, it has four floors.
Body paragraph 2
In the 2008 map, there were a few basic facilities. There were
stairs
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 in the centre of the
museum
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, and the right side of the
stairs
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 was
Cloaks'
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the Cloaks'
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room
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. On the left side of the
stairs
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, there was a shop. On the second
floor
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, there was only the reception and reading
room
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 behind it.
Conclusion
In the 2012 plan, there were crucial changes to the
museum
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. The
stairs
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 were replaced with a lift.
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, there were newly constructed areas,
such
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 as
children's
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a children's
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 area in basement
floor
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, and on the third
floor
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, a new restaurant and terrace were built.
While
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 in ground
floor
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, the reception and clock
room
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 were combined , the special exhibition
room
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 remained the same

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task response
Give a clearer main view at the start. Say that the south wing was made much larger, with more floors and new rooms.
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Check every part of both plans before writing. Some key changes are missing or not clear, such as the new lift, the changed use of rooms, and the new lower and upper floors.
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Make comparisons more exact. For example, say which rooms stayed in the same place, which rooms were removed, and which new rooms were added.
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Use the right names from the plans. Do not change “cloakroom” to “clock room”, and do not say a room stayed the same if the plan shows a change.
coherence and cohesion
Use a simple four-part plan: introduction, main view, details for 2008, and details for 2012. This will make the answer easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Group details by floor or by area. Do not move from one floor to another without clear links such as “On the ground floor” and “On the first floor”.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear comparison words: “while”, “whereas”, “in contrast”, and “by 2012”. Make sure each link joins two correct ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid short or broken sentences. For example, write “The museum underwent major development” instead of “the museum undergo into a significant development”.
task response
You describe the main idea that the museum became larger and had more facilities after the work.
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You include several useful details, such as the stairs, shop, cloakroom, reception, reading room, children’s area, restaurant, and terrace.
coherence and cohesion
Your answer has a clear beginning and then gives details for each map.
coherence and cohesion
You use some comparison language, including “whereas”, “additionally”, and “while”.
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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