You have just returned home from a holiday and have received photographs from a friend who was on holiday with you. Write to your frind thanking them for the photographs. You should include: -a description of the photos -the most memorable thing about the holiday -invite them to come and stay with you

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Dear Minakshi, Hope you are doing well. I am writing
this
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letter to thank you
regarding
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the photographs that you have sent of our recent
trip
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to Banff. I really want to appreciate your
photpgraphy
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photography
skills as the pictures you clicked are
amzing
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amazing
. I love the candid pictures as it has the clear view of
mountains
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the mountains
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and
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, and
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the way you captured the random moments is speechless.
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, the
trip
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is unforgettable as we shared lovely moments
but
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, but
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the one that will
stays
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in my heart was the
late night
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late-night
talks and enjoying freely without any stress.
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busy
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a busy
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schedule and everyday hustle, it is very challenging to talk with each other
but
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, but
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thanks to
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trip
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, which gives us
opportunity
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the opportunity
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to share our life updates.
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this
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trip
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, I feel
having
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that having
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regular meetups can be energetic and refreshes our
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.
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, I am planning to organise a sleepover at my home on
long
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the long
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weekend as you will
also
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have a
day
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off. On that
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, we can cook together and watch
latest
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the latest
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webseries
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web series
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along with
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some chit-chat.
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, if you can come a
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before, we can go
for
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shopping as well. Hope
,
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we will have a great time together. I will look forward
for
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your response. Let me know if you have other plans on the long weekend so we can arrange
home
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a home
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stay on another
day
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. Best regards, Muskan

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Give a little more detail about one or two photos, for example who is in them and where they were taken. This will make your thanks feel more personal.
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Use a more direct line for the invite, such as: “I would love you to come and stay with me over the long weekend.”
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear order: thanks, holiday memory, then invite. Keep this good plan.
coherence and cohesion
Some long sentences have too many ideas. Split them into shorter sentences so they are easier to read.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear links between ideas, such as “Also”, “Because of this”, and “For this reason”. Check word forms too, for example “give us an opportunity” and “will stay in my heart”.
task response
You answer all parts of the task: you thank your friend, talk about the photos and holiday, and invite your friend to your home.
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The warm and friendly tone is right for a letter to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
The opening and closing are polite and fit the letter well.
coherence and cohesion
Each main paragraph has one clear job, so the reader can follow your message easily.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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