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University student are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

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Introduction
In recent years, studying overseas has become popular among university
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 trend is largely driven
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 increasing awareness and better career opportunities they might get in foreign countries.
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 development has both drawbacks and advantages, I believe that its benefits are more substantial.
Body paragraph 1
The principal reason for
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 trend is growing awareness
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 higher education learners. These learners,
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, today have access to the internet, where they can not only search the institutions but
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, they can compare fees, courses,
colleges
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and colleges
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 available around the globe.
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, more
students
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 are getting influenced by
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 led to rapid expansion in the
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 of learners preferring to study abroad.
Body paragraph 2
Another contributing factor for
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 of better career opportunities
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abroad.
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 happens during and after
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 their studies.
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, some
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 start working for part time
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 studying in their field, and
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 boosts their work experience and skills.
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,
students
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 will have higher chances of achieving their dream job with that experience as soon as they pass the course.
Conclusion
In conclusion, studying in foreign countries
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 increased because of
students
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 becoming more informed about it and
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 greater job options available
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however
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,
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 trend
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 have significant impact on the migrants, as they have to face cultural and language barriers, which can result in isolation and mental health issues among
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Answer the main question more directly. Say clearly why the good points are stronger than the bad points, then give reasons for both sides.
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Your two body parts explain why students go abroad, not the advantages of studying abroad. Change these into clear benefits, such as better learning, work skills, and wider views.
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Give more space to the bad points. Explain the cost, homesickness, language problems, or culture shock, and then show why the good points are still greater.
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Use examples that prove your point. For example, explain how a student’s part-time work or new language skill can help them get work later.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main parts, and an end. However, the main parts do not fully match the question, so the whole flow is weak.
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Use one main idea in each body part. A strong plan could be: first, the main benefits; second, the main problems and why they are less serious.
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Link ideas with simple words such as “First”, “Also”, “However”, “For example”, and “Therefore”. Do not repeat “This trend” too often.
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Make the final part match your view. It should restate that the benefits are greater and briefly name the key reasons.
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You give a clear view in the first part: you believe the good points are stronger.
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You include useful real-life ideas, such as online information, part-time work, skills, and job chances.
coherence and cohesion
The essay is easy to follow because it has clear paragraphs and uses cause-and-effect links such as “As a result” and “Consequently”.
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The final part does mention problems like language and culture barriers, which shows you understand that there are two sides.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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