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The table shows the number of visitors to Edinburgh Zoo during the year before and after 2 pandas were introduced. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

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The table shows the number of visitors to Edinburgh Zoo during the year before and after 2 pandas were introduced. The charts show the results of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
The table provides statistics on individuals visiting
to
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Edinburgh Zoo during the year before and after two pandas were
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introduced
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. The charts
illustrates
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 the consequences of the questionnaires asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visits, during
the
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each
periods
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period
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,
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 satisfaction and no responses remained intact over the period,
coupled with
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 the total percentage of the tourists, the number of people who were immensely satisfied experienced an increase after the pandas were introduced.
Initially
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, only 74,000 people decided to visit the Zoo, thereby accounting for 40% for the satisfied, and 35% for the dissatisfied respondents. The proportion of the guests who were excessively satisfied and dissatisfied shared an equal segment, standing at 10%.
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, 5% of the guests refused to participate in the survey.
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, after the introduction of the pandas,
during
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 365
days
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 the
entire
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total
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 number of tourists constituted for 82,000.
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 the figures for the satisfaction levels and for the persons who did not choose to give
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feedback maintained a consistent share, extremely gratitude level rose sharply to 35%,
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 normal and extraordinarily
disappointment
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disappointed
 levels declined steadily to 15% and 5%, respectively.

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