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Life has changed in a better state in the past 100 years. What is your opinion about it?

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Introduction
Life has changed significantly over the past 100 years. I believe that these changes have made life better because technology has made daily tasks easier and improved
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 to education.
Body paragraph 1
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, modern transportation has made
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’s lives easier and safer. In the past,
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 had fewer transportation options, which made travelling to hospitals during emergencies more difficult. Nowadays, cars allow
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 to reach hospitals more quickly.
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,
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 can
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 medical care more easily, which can help save lives.
Body paragraph 2
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, technology has improved
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 to information and education. Smartphones allow
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 to find information within seconds and use applications to support their learning.
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, students can use educational applications and ChatGPT to understand difficult subjects and improve their skills.
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, learning has become more convenient, and students can
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 educational resources whenever they need them.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I believe that life has improved over the past 100 years because technology has made transportation easier and provided
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 with better
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 to education.

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task response
Your view is clear from the start and stays the same. To make it stronger, add one more idea, such as better health care, safer work, or more free time.
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Your main points are good, but some support is quite short. Explain more clearly how fast travel and phone apps change life for most people.
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The example of ChatGPT is useful, but it is very new. You could also give a wider example, such as online lessons, digital books, or free study sites.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear shape: opening, two main parts, and an ending. Each main part has one clear idea.
coherence and cohesion
Use a few more linking words to show cause and result, such as “therefore”, “because of this”, and “in addition”. Do not use too many.
coherence and cohesion
The last part repeats the opening well. You can make it better by briefly bringing both main ideas together before giving your final view.
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You answer the question directly and give a clear view that life is better now.
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Your examples are on topic: travel to hospital and study through phones both support your view.
coherence and cohesion
The words “Firstly”, “Secondly”, “For example”, “As a result”, and “In conclusion” help the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas move in a clear order, and there is no off-topic information.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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