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The pie charts below show the different types of courses, which were followed by the students during the years of 1984, 1994 and 2004

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The pie charts below show the different types of courses, which were followed by the students during the years of 1984, 1994 and 2004
The diagrams illustrate the percentages of students participating in four different types of
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 across three years
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 1984, 1994,
2004
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and 2004
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, face-to-face
courses
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 were the most popular choice in all three years, even though their percentage went down over time.
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, mixed
media
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courses
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 became much more popular. Online
courses
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 stayed quite low,
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correspondence
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courses
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 slightly dropped by the end of the period. In 1984, most students chose face-to-face
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 at 67%.
Correspondence
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courses
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 were second with 20%, and mixed
media
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courses
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 were the lowest at 13%. In 1994, face-to-face
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 decreased to 54%.
Correspondence
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courses
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 stayed the same at 20%,
while
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 mixed
media
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courses
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 increased a little to 15%. Online
courses
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 started
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this
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 year with 11%. In 2004, face-to-face
courses
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 fell again to 40%.
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, mixed
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courses
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 grew a lot and reached 35%.
On the other hand
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,
correspondence
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courses
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 dropped to 15%, and online
courses
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also
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 went down to 10%, which was the lowest number in 2004.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words courses, media, correspondence with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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