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Some people say that some urgent problems in modern society can only be solved with international cooperation. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Introduction
The increasing globalisation of the
world
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 is helping different
countries
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 face some of the
problems
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 found in today's society. Some
people
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 argue that international cooperation has become increasingly important, as
countries
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 can benefit from support and resources from other nations. In my opinion, joining forces to tackle
problems
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 that affect
people
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's daily lives is extremely important, regardless of where the help comes from.
Body paragraph 1
Natural disasters are becoming increasingly common, taking different forms
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 as storms, earthquakes and floods. Many poor and remote areas suffer from these disasters, and it would be extremely difficult for local communities to overcome
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 situations without assistance from important organisations around the
world
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 and even governments from other
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. A great example of
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 was the devastating floods that left millions of
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 homeless in Brazil in 2024.
This
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 disaster led to an immense international mobilisation, with
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 and organisations sending assistance from other
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. The Israeli government
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 sent soldiers to help with rescue operations.
Body paragraph 2
International aid organisations exist to make the
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 a better place to live.
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, the internet is a powerful tool that helps connect
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 around the
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, making it much easier to access information about events happening at the moment.
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, the
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 still faces
problems
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 caused by humans,
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 as wars. International cooperation is particularly important in these situations, as
countries
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 can work together to prevent conflicts and save lives.
Conclusion
To conclude
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,
people
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 are living in an increasingly connected
world
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, which makes it easier for
countries
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 in different parts of the
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 to support each other in overcoming
problems
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, whether they are caused by nature or by humans. Wealthier
countries
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 helping less developed nations sets a positive example and creates valuable opportunities for future generations.

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task response
Your view is clear: you agree that countries should work together. To make it stronger, say how far you agree in the first part, such as “I strongly agree.” Also add one short point about what each country can still do by itself. This will show a more full answer to the question.
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Your two main ideas are good: help after natural events and work to stop war. Explain the link to “only be solved” more fully. For example, say that floods may need help from other countries, but local plans and good building rules are also needed.
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The Brazil example is useful and real. Add one or two details about how outside help made a clear change, such as food, homes, doctors, or rescue work. This would make the point more clear.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear shape: first part, two body parts, and a final part. Each body part has one main idea. Keep this clear plan in future writing.
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer links between ideas. In the second body part, the points about aid groups, the internet, and war move quite fast. You could start a new part for war, or use a link such as “Another urgent problem is war.”
coherence and cohesion
Some words are used many times, such as “problems”, “countries”, and “help”. Use simple other words when you can, for example “issues”, “nations”, “support”, or “aid”. This will make the writing flow better.
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You answer the question directly and keep the same clear view from the first part to the final part.
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The essay uses good examples of urgent world issues, including natural events and war. These are very relevant to the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your opening and final parts work well together. The final part sums up your main view without adding a new main idea.
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The ideas are easy to follow, and the order is natural: natural events first, then human-made issues.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • global warming
  • climate change
  • emissions
  • pandemic
  • vaccines
  • terrorism
  • cyber-attacks
  • nuclear proliferation
  • economic instability
  • financial crises
  • IMF (International Monetary Fund)
  • World Bank
  • humanitarian crises
  • environmental conservation
  • endangered species
  • deforestation
  • ecosystems
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