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The following plans show recent archaeological findings at a historic site in the year 2004 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
The two plans illustrate what archaeologists found at an ancient coastal site in 2004 and how much more they uncovered a decade later.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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, it is clear from the maps that the number of discoveries rose dramatically over the period, with several major buildings unearthed and the total of dwellings almost tripling,
whereas
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 the woodland covering the western half was largely cleared to make way for the excavations.
Body paragraph 2
The first map reveals that, in 2004, dense trees occupied the entire left-hand side of the area,
while
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 mountains lay in the north-east. Only three old houses were visible, one situated directly below the hills and a pair
further
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 east, and a temple stood in the south-eastern corner beside the sea, so the majority of the land remained unexplored.
Conclusion
The second map shows that, by 2014, the picture was significantly different. A stadium was located in the north-west, where the forest once grew, and just a couple of trees survived in the south-west.
Furthermore
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, a toilet block appeared in the north, and a palace emerged in the south, directly west of the temple, which was retained unchanged.
Moreover
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, the housing finds increased to nine, arranged in a double row along the eastern edge, roughly triple the earlier figure.
Consequently
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, if digging continued at
this
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 rate, the whole settlement would be exposed within another ten years.

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task response
Do not add a guess about what may happen in the next ten years. The task asks you to report the plans, so keep the last line on the changes shown.
task response
Be careful with claims such as “the majority of the land remained unexplored.” The plan shows few finds, but it does not clearly say that all other land was unexplored.
task response
Add a little more direct comparison of the old and new house sites. This would make the change in the east even clearer.
coherence and cohesion
Your order is clear: first the main changes, then the first plan, then the later plan. Keep this strong map-by-map order.
coherence and cohesion
Use fewer link words in one paragraph. For example, “Furthermore”, “Moreover”, and “Consequently” are close together. A more direct list of changes can sound smoother.
coherence and cohesion
The final sentence does not fit the report as well as the rest. End with a fact from the 2014 plan instead of a future idea.
task response
You cover the main changes: less woodland, more houses, and new large sites such as the stadium, toilet block, and palace.
task response
You make clear comparisons between the two years, especially for the woodland and the number of houses.
coherence and cohesion
The overview gives the reader a clear picture of the biggest changes before the details.
coherence and cohesion
Place words such as “north-west”, “south-west”, “eastern edge”, and “directly west” help the reader follow the plans.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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