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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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Introduction
The diagram illustrates the changes in the site plan of the Beechwood
Farm
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 in 1950 and today.
Body paragraph 1
Overall
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, the
farm
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 experiences some additions other than the minor redevelopments. The spaces for harvesting remained the same,
while
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 more space has been allocated to accommodation facilities in the area.
Body paragraph 2
In 1950, the
farm
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 was devoted to crop and livestock farming. The large field at the top of the map belonged entirely to the sheep. Other than the space to keep the cattle, there was a significantly big barn, farmhouse and room for the chickens on the bottom right corner.
On the contrary
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, the left-hand side was dedicated to crop cultivation with fields for fruit trees and fruit and vegetable plantation.
Conclusion
Since
then
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, the
farm
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 has witnessed extensive renovation. The cultivation fields remain the same, other than the
farm
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 shop addition to the field of fruit trees, but the field for the sheep is now divided in the middle. The left-hand side is renovated for the campers, and solar panels are placed on
other
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the other
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 side, both having parking lots connected to the new road, which used to be an old track. It is now smaller and located at the bottom. Its old area is now used as holiday cottages.

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task response
Give a more exact report of all key changes. Say clearly what was removed, what was added, and what stayed the same. For example, explain the new use of the old track area and the change to the sheep field in a more direct way.
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Check map facts very carefully. The sentence about a farm shop being added to the fruit tree field is not clear. State its place in relation to the field, rather than saying it is in the field.
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Use clear map words such as north, south, east, west, beside, between, and in the centre. This will help the reader see where each place is.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a good four-part shape: start, main view, past, and now. Make the last two parts easier to follow by grouping places by area, for example the north area first and the south area next.
coherence and cohesion
Avoid long sentences with many ideas joined by commas. Split them into shorter sentences. For example, write one sentence about the camping area and one about the solar panels.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more exactly. 'On the contrary' is not right when you describe another part of the farm. Use 'Meanwhile', 'In the west', or 'By contrast' instead.
coherence and cohesion
Keep the same names for places. Use 'fruit and vegetable field' throughout, rather than changing the name or using unclear phrases such as 'room for the chickens'.
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You give a clear main view: crop areas stayed in place, while land for visitors and energy was added.
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You include many important features, such as the sheep field, crop fields, barn, farmhouse, camping area, solar panels, parking, road, and holiday homes.
coherence and cohesion
The opening sentence tells the reader what the two plans show.
coherence and cohesion
The overview comes early and helps the reader understand the main changes before the details.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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