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(ReRe)Some argue that schools should prioritize life skills such as working in teams and solving problems instead of traditional academics. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
It is contended that soft
skills
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, including teamwork and problem solving, should be emphasised in the education system, rather than hard
skills
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,
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 as traditional academic subjects. I largely agree because these
skills
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 help
students
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 use
knowledge
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 effectively and require regular practice.
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, schools must still provide a strong academic foundation.
Body paragraph 1
Advancements in technology,
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 as AI, make it easier to find academic information.
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, having academic
knowledge
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 is less valuable
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how to cooperate and manage a team, using
knowledge
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 and information, is
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 more important. In
school
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,
for example
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,
students
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 who engage in group projects
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 need to collaborate with team members and discuss ideas to reach a conclusion, using data or insight provided by AI.
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 experience through team activities cultivates
students
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' cooperative skillsets, which will be significantly helpful when they start working.
Body paragraph 2
Problem-solving
skills
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 are not developed overnight. They require plenty of practice,
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 as tackling various problems and learning through trial and error. In
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,
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,
students
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 have numerous types of problems, e.g., managing a budget in a
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 festival, running a sports club, and conflicts among individuals.
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,
students
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 can obtain advice from teachers and senior
students
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 based on
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past experiences and
knowledge
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, which significantly
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 learning efficiency.
School
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,
therefore
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, is an ideal place to provide opportunities to solve problems, through which
students
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 can develop these abilities.
Conclusion
In conclusion, I largely agree with focusing on teamwork
skills
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 and problem-solving abilities in
school
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. Reading, writing and mathematics remain essential, but schools should place greater emphasis on helping
students
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 apply what they learn through teamwork and practical problem-solving.

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task response
Your view is clear: you mostly agree, but you say school subjects still matter. To make this stronger, explain more fully why reading, writing, and maths must stay important. This will show a more complete answer to both sides of the question.
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The first main point says that AI makes school facts less important. Be careful with this claim. AI can give wrong or weak answers, so students still need school knowledge to check and use it well. Add this point to make your idea more balanced.
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Your examples are useful and linked to school life. Add one short, clear result after each example. For example, say how planning a school event can help a student deal with a real problem at work or at home.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear shape: introduction, two main parts, and conclusion. Keep this good plan. Make the link from the first paragraph to the second more direct by saying that both team work and problem solving need real school tasks.
coherence and cohesion
Some long sentences are hard to follow. For example, the sentence beginning “Therefore, having academic knowledge...” has too many ideas. Split it into two or three short sentences so the meaning is clear.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words with care. You use “For example”, “In school”, and “Therefore” well, but do not repeat them too often. You can also use simple links such as “As a result”, “At the same time”, and “For this reason”.
coherence and cohesion
Make the main idea of each body paragraph very clear in its first sentence. The second body paragraph does this well. In the first one, start by saying that team work helps students use what they learn, then give the AI and group-work example.
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You answer the question directly and keep the same clear view from the start to the end.
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You give school-based examples, such as group work, a school event budget, and a sports club. These make your ideas easy to understand.
coherence and cohesion
Each body paragraph has one main idea, and the conclusion returns to your main view.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction clearly shows both your main view and the need for a strong base in school subjects.
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