The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

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The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.
The bar chart illustrates
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sales
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the sales
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of global mobile
phone
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phones
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by each brand in 3 different times. The brands are Samsung, Apple, Nokia, LG and ZTE. The units will
measured
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be measured
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in millions.
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Overall
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Overall,
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it's clear from the graph that Nokia had the
most
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highest
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sales
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ratio among all brands in the 3 times
According to
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what is shown, Samsung
was
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had
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the
second
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second-highest
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sales
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ratio. In
2009
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2009,
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it sold around 250 and it was the lowest year
and
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, and
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it rose to approximately 330
and
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, and
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it kept increasing in 2013 to reach their highest year with about 450. In terms of Apple
in
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, in
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2009
had
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it had
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the lowest
sales
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between
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among
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all brands
with
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, with
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close to 20
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; however
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however
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however,
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in 2011
got
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it got
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to 90
to
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, to
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end up in 2013 with 150. LG was the only brand that kept declining. In
2009
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2009,
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was the highest
sales
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for
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, for
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LG and it was around 130
and
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, and
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kept
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it kept
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decreasing to 60 in 2013.
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ZTE had similar
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figures
with 50, 55, 60 in 2009, 2011, 2013. respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Global sales
  • Mobile phone brands
  • Market share
  • Trends
  • Growth
  • Decline
  • Technological advancements
  • Innovation
  • Consumer preferences
  • Demographics
  • Market dominance
  • Brand loyalty
  • Comparative analysis
  • Sales figures
  • Data interpretation
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