You and your friend have both been accepted to a study abroad programme in Paris France. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter : Congratulate him/her for also being accepted Ask him/her if she would like to be your roommate Discuss possible activities that the two of you could do together Write at least 150 words. You do not need to write any addresses Begin your letter as follow: Dear,

#friend #study #programme #paris #france #roommate #activities #two #addresses

Dear John, Have you heard the news? I still can not believe, our dreams come true in our eyes. We are going to study in Paris.

This

is unreal. I want to congratulate you,

this

is a big success. I know how much work and time you have to

sacrificed

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to achieve

this

goal.

Moreover

, I am very happy about our achievement. Have you thought about accommodation yet? It would be great if you agreed to be my roommate. What do you think about it? I hope you like it, we know each other very

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, so in my opinion, it is a great solution. As I mentioned before, I have a big plan for

this

journey. I want to be very active in France, To be honest, I have thought about some dancing lessons.

Additionally

, I want to continue my running training and start preparing for some competitions. Do you have any plans

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activities? I truly believe we find something to participate in together, maybe you already have something in your mind. I am really looking forward to hearing from you Best wishes, John

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Ensure accuracy and consistency in your tenses. For example, 'our dreams come true in our eyes' should be 'our dreams are coming true before our eyes.'

coherence cohesion

Consider using transitions more effectively to link your ideas cohesively. For example, instead of 'Additionally,' you could use 'In addition to that,' or 'Furthermore,' to make the text flow better.

task achievement

The tone of your letter is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend, which makes your writing engaging and pleasant to read.

task achievement

You clearly addressed all parts of the task by congratulating your friend, asking about being roommates, and discussing potential activities.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

186 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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