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The pie charts below show average household expanditure in Hong Kong and Britain in the year 2000.

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The pie charts below show average household expanditure in Hong Kong and Britain in the year 2000.
The pie charts illustrate the proportions of household
expenditure
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 across five different categories in
Britain
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 and
Hong
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Kong
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 in 2000.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 other goods recorded the highest proportion of household spending in
Britain
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,
whereas
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 housing accounted for the largest share of household
expenditure
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 in
Hong
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Kong
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.
According to
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 the charts, the three largest categories of
expenditure
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 in
Britain
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 were other goods, food and housing, at 36%, 22% and 18%, respectively. Other goods
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 the only category among these three to experience a decrease, falling from 36% to 28%, a difference of 8 percentage points.
By contrast
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, food
expenditure
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 increased from 22% to 27%,
while
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 housing experienced a significant rise, reaching 32%. Regarding the two smallest categories, clothing and transportation, both recorded a decrease in
Hong
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Kong
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. Clothing experienced a slight decline from 7% in
Britain
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 to 4% in
Hong
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Kong
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,
while
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 transportation saw a considerable fall from 17% to 9%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, britain, hong, kong with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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