Fatherhood ought to be emphasized as much as motherhood. The idea that women are solely responsible for deciding whether or not to have babies leads on to the idea that they are also responsible for bringing the children up. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

According to some people, the
role
of a
father
in bringing up a
child
is as important as that of a
mother
and
hence
fatherhood must be lauded as much as motherhood. I fully agree with
this
view. Of course, the
mother
has a greater
role
than the
father
in bringing the
child
into
this
world, but once the baby is born both parents play an equal
role
in raising him. A
father
’s affection for the
child
is as pure and invaluable as that of a
mother
.
In addition
, both parents have the same biological relation with the
child
. Of course, the
mother
has a slightly more important
role
in the
first
few months after the baby is born, but afterwards, their roles and responsibilities are more or less the same. Men’s idea of parenting has
also
changed dramatically over the years. Earlier many men only provided financially for the
child
and shied away from other responsibilities of fatherhood. But the new age
father
belongs to an altogether different species. He believes in sharing every aspect of parenting with his wife. Needless to say, the modern
father
plays with the
child
, cuddles him, changes his diapers and calms him down when he is crying. He ensures that the
child
is fed and clothed properly and helps with his studies and homework. The modern
mother
also
expects
this
of her husband. It is practically impossible for a woman to look after her
child
all the time and still pursue a demanding career. Needless to say, young mothers
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these days want their husbands to have the same
role
as them in raising the
child
. What’s more, whether or not the
father
plays an active
role
in the upbringing of the
child
, his son or daughter will always feel more secure and protected under his wings.
For example
, if a
child
is harassed by a bully, the
father
is the
first
person he approaches for support. If the
father
wasn’t important, the
child
would not turn to him in the
first
place. What’s more, in many families, the
role
of the
father
is not limited to providing emotional support. He is
also
the
bread winner
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. He is the one who provides for the
child
and his
mother
. In conclusion, the inalienable blood relation and the emotional bond that the
father
shares with the
child
make fatherhood as important as motherhood.
Also
, I believe the idyllic joy of parenthood is as unique and special for a
father
as it is for a
mother
.
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