Inventors are not as important to society as doctors. To what extent do you agree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, we can see science everywhere around us. New
inventions
makes
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the
lives
of
the
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apply

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people
easier. On another hand
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,

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doctors
are really important persons for us.
Doctors
are the person who
help
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helps

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us to get well when we become sick. They save our
lives
. In my opinion,
inventions
and
doctors
are incomparable both have different roles in our
lives
.
Lots
of
inventions
have become
v
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a

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ery important part of our
lives
.
For example
,
aero planes
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aeroplanes

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by which we can travel and reach to
another countries
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another country
other countries

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earlier as compare to
another
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other

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means of transportation. Computers which is the most amazing invention. We are totally now become dependent on computers, it has
lots
of benefits and is useful in many ways. In offices, shopping malls, schools and homes,
people
use computers to save
lots
of data, documents, calculations and doing assignments.
Furthermore
,
smart phones
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smartphones

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are
also
one
of the most important
inventions
for peoples.
People
found it most convenient for them in carrying as well as
lots
of applications are available due to which they can contact with their family, relatives and friends.
Moreover
, there are
lots
of things that are invented by inventors that had made
house work
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housework

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also
easy
for example
, home appliances, washing machines, refrigerators etc. On another hand
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doctors
are most knowledgeable persons that can treat different diseases.
Doctors
study a lot and always want to get rid of illness from a patient. If there will be no
doctors
then
no
one
can protect the sick
people
and mortality rate increase extremely. There are
lots
of procedures
also
done to protect
the
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apply

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one
life.
Doctors
perform different screening and diagnose
d
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the

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isease properly. In conclusion, both have different role and values in our
lives
, without
doctors
human beings cannot survive
healthy
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healthily

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or we can say that no
one
can be there to protect from illnesses. Obviously
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,

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without inventors
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,

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new
inventions
cannot take place and there would be no new unique discovery
people
would be able to see.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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