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These days, mobile phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Recently, the introduction of advanced ways of
communication
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 has brought the globe into
one
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 small village, but despite
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 fact, there are still some people who think that
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 advancement in telecommunication has many drawbacks.
Although
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 it is much more convenient to contact someone living far away through the internet, some individuals think that
communication
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 itself lost its emotional value. No
one
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 can deny that it is much easier now to reach to a relative who lives
in
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 a different continent, which is why many people nowadays consider a smartphone to be
one
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 of the essential gadgets to carry around while travelling.
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, if someone is travelling to a different country to attend university, his family members can effortlessly check his updates through social networking websites.
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, the internet not only makes
communication
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 between people easier, but
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 makes it more accessible to receive worldwide news.
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, many people believe that communicating through virtual means resulted in a significant loss of emotions.
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 to say, when speaking on the phone to a friend who needs emotional support, you do not really get the chance to enjoy the pleasure of physical contact which is indeed a crucial matter.
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, many studies have been made to prove the importance of physical means of interaction
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 as hugging and shaking hands. In conclusion, it seems reasonable to suggest that the recent advancement in
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 is of great benefit to many people. Though there might be some drawbacks to using these recent methods of
communication
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, the positive outcomes of bringing people who live far away from
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 another and the convenience it brings to reach out
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to
 anyone living anywhere in the world makes the internet certainly a more advantageous tool.
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