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Many governments invest a great deal of money in space research. What are the advantages and potential disadvantages of spending money on space exploration?

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People are naturally curious, and it is
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 curiosity that drives our fascination with outer
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. Many countries around the world spend billions of dollars every year on
space
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 programs that send people to
space
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, investigate planets or make discoveries. In
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 essay, I will outline two main benefits of spending
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 on
space
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research
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 some drawbacks of
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 investment. Certainly,
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 exploration can bring about many positive impacts. One of the most important benefits is the technology it creates.
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, everyday items
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 as sunglasses, non-stick pans, and important medical devices like pacemakers were all invented because of
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research
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. Another advantage is the possibility of finding a planet so humans can continue to exist. If we keep destroying our natural resources and polluting our environment, having a backup place to move to will be very useful.
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 there are clear benefits, there are
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 serious outcomes that can result from spending
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 on
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research
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. The main issue is that it takes
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 away from important public services like healthcare and education.
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, in the USA, the Government continues to pour
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 into
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 programs despite high numbers of homeless people
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 expensive hospital care. Another problem is
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 junk. When rockets and satellites are no longer in use, they become part of the litter
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 already cluttering up
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.
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 debris can be dangerous for future missions and contributes to the global pollution problem. In conclusion,
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research
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 can have life-changing impacts here on Earth.
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, it does come at a potentially huge cost if a nation doesn’t manage its spending well and ignores the environmental problems caused by missions.

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