You have recently moved to a new neighbourhood and would like to join a sports centre there. You have found a private sports club. Write a letter to the manager of the sports club. In your letter, introduce yourself say why are you interested in this sports club ask some questions about the club e.g facilities, membership, costs etc. Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.  Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I trust you are doing well. The purpose of

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letter is to express my interest in joining your sports club. Myself Ruchin Patel, and I have recently moved in the neighbourhood of the Bay Area.

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that, I am currently working at Apple as a Design Engineer. Ever since I

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relocated to

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new neighbourhood, I have been looking for a sports centre

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suitable for my needs. And, I have got to know that your place has many cutting-edge equipment which might be useful to me.

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that, outdoor activities

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as the swimming pool

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Badminton are best suitable for me as I would love to spend some time outside as well.

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your website has comprehensive information about different memberships, I was not able to find the enrolment form to sign up.

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but not least, please confirm if your facility has a private shower room for members. Thank you for your help. Yours faithfully, Ruchin Patel

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Task Achievement

Include a closing statement that indicates you're looking forward to a response or further engagement.

Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure that all questions are clearly articulated to make it easier for the reader to provide answers.

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The introduction is clear and provides a good context for the letter. It establishes who you are and why you are writing.

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The letter maintains a formal yet friendly tone, which is suitable for such communications.

Coherence and Cohesion

The letter is well-organized, with each paragraph dedicated to a specific aspect of your inquiry.

Coherence and Cohesion

The greetings and closing are appropriate and convey respect and politeness.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
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even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

169 words

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