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some believe that government should provide free health care.However some think that government may not able to provide health care and people should pat for it. what do you think?

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Authorities find it challenging to subsidies the
health
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care
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 system, due to the increase of financial requirement, which in turn, drives some people to suggest that the patients should provide themselves,
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, others insist that
health
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care
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 should be governmental responsibility.
Health
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care
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 is fundamental for any community, and it is considered the
bed rock
solid unweathered rock lying beneath surface deposits of soil
bedrock
 of the society security and future,
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 the government should create
strong medical infrastructure
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a strong medical infrastructure
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 able to confront the citizens emergences and medical needs
.
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Furthermore
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, the
health
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care
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 should include free medicine and vaccines.
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 high qualified staff to guarantee appropriate medical
care
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 and possessional service. In terms of providing medical sector,
government
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the government
 needs unprecedented measures to tackle
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 problem.
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, reorganization of the country budget to be spent on
health
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 system rather than weapons and war preparations.
Evenmore
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Even more
, it should encourage private investment in medial
care
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. The other approach, which claims individuals to provide the
health
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 insurance on their own, represents the injustice for many reasons
.
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, citizens pay taxes for their regimes,
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 they expect convenient
services especially
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services, especially
 when it comes to
basics
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the basics
 of life
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 as education and
health
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.
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,
this
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 notion generates inequality of opportunity because people don't possess the same financial abilities to afford
health
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care
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.
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,
this
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 concept brings hazardous ramifications to the society and produces disastrous implications
,
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,
such
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 as the absence of affiliation owing to that people will feel that their
county
a politically organized body of people under a single government
country
 is not
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care
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caring
 about them. In conclusion,
health
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care
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 system is crucial for any society
seek
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seeks
 to ameliorate its present and secure its future.
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, if there is not efficient and free
health
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, people will suffer from illness and endure compromised
health
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.
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, the community will lose his best element which is the human competence.
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