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Many people prefer to spend money and not save it. What are the reasons? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Who does not like to spend
money
? Now, people are likely to spend
money
 rather than to save it because they would like to enjoy their life or show off. It happens to most people and I think it is a negative development which affects a lot
to
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of
 their
future
. Most people think that human
just have
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just has
 one life and we only live once, so why don’t we enjoy it? With that point, people start to spend more and more until overspending. Salary is growing up now in most of the countries. Enhance, people are earning more and they want to show off their wealth. Sometimes, they just simply want to buy the item because it is trending. Sadly, it mostly happens to young people. Spending without thinking is a negative lifestyle. Yes, you can say that you can earn more than you pay. Absolutely, it is not wrong.
However
, have you ever thought about your
future
? The job is not going to stick with you forever and so does salary.
This
 month, your bank account might have more than 4,000USD, but
next
 month, who knows? Life not only has
happiness but
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happiness, but
also
 has unluckiness, which means ‘’a rainy day’’ could occur.
For example
, what if you have some bad news and your
money
 already ran out? How to solve it? No one can stop you from spending your
money
. I understand that we just live once and
yes we
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yes, we
 can enjoy and do anything we want but do not go
until
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to
. In my opinion, spending without thinking and saving is a negative development. Honestly, I really hope that people will think carefully before they buy something. All of us should have a
future
 plan. Remember that living is not only for
this
moment but
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moment, but
also
 for the
future
.
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