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Parents should not pressure their children to choose a particular profession. Young people should have the freedom to choose path they like.

#parents #pressure #children #profession #people #freedom #path
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Youth are the citizens who need to
takecare
Suggestion
take care
 of
soceity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
 for
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next generation
Suggestion
the next generation
. They have have
right
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 to decide in which profession they need to choose, while some people say that parents need to select particular course and tell them to study or else they may take wrong decisions. In my
opinion in
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opinion, in
 society
eveyone
used as an intensive especially to indicate something unexpected
even
 have rights to do whatever they
want but
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want, but
 if
childeren
a young person of either sex
children
 are spoiling their
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life its
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life, it
life it
 is
responsibelty
Suggestion
the responsibility
responsibility
a responsibility
responsibilities
 of their elders to tell them. Young people who are
intrested
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
 in specific
filed
catch or pick up (balls) in baseball or cricket
field
 may have
right
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 to get into it.
if
Suggestion
If
 they get
succefuly
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
 in that their
life
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 will be beautiful like they want.
For
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example their
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example, there
example there
 are many crickets who are
particullar
unique or specific to a person or thing or category
particular
choosen
one who is the object of choice; who is given preference
chosen
choosing
 that field and living happy
life
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 now. If guardians forced
childeren
a young person of either sex
children
 to
uninstrested
not having or showing interest
uninterested
 path. Students cannot able to study properly in that and their particular stream
.
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.
 Which will
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 child
life
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.
In
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contrast they
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contrast, they
 will be some
childeren
a young person of either sex
children
 who want to go on bad way and who are unsuccessful in their
selective
Suggestion
selected
select
 field
also
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. For them
wellwishers
someone who shares your feelings or opinions and hopes that you will be successful
well-wishers
 have the
right
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 to advise and pressure to take particular profession.
some
Suggestion
Some
 youth
wonot
feel or have a desire for; want strongly
want
won't
listen
Suggestion
to listen
 to
this
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advices
Suggestion
advice
 and spoil their
life
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.
As a result
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 all age people have their own freedom to choose about
studys
be a student; follow a course of study; be enrolled at an institute of learning
studies
study
 according to their
intrest
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interest
interests
.If
their
in or at that place
there
 cannot and spoiling their
life
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 parents have the
right
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 to tell him what is good and what is wrong So parents need to leave their child freely and from back need to
examin
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
examine
 whether they are going in
right
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 path
are
introduces an alternative
or
 not.
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