Parents should not pressure their children to choose a particular profession. Young people should have the freedom to choose path they like.

Youth are the citizens who need to
takecare
Suggestion
take care
of
soceity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
for
next generation
Suggestion
the next generation
. They have have
right
to decide in which profession they need to choose, while some people say that parents need to select particular course and tell them to study or else they may take wrong decisions. In my
opinion in
Accept comma addition
opinion, in
society
eveyone
used as an intensive especially to indicate something unexpected
even
have rights to do whatever they
want but
Accept comma addition
want, but
if
childeren
a young person of either sex
children
are spoiling their
life its
Accept comma addition
life, it
life it
is
responsibelty
Suggestion
the responsibility
responsibility
a responsibility
responsibilities
of their elders to tell them. Young people who are
intrested
having or showing interest; especially curiosity or fascination or concern
interested
in specific
filed
catch or pick up (balls) in baseball or cricket
field
may have
right
to get into it.
if
Suggestion
If
they get
succefuly
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
in that their
life
will be beautiful like they want.
For
example their
Accept comma addition
example, there
example there
are many crickets who are
particullar
unique or specific to a person or thing or category
particular
choosen
one who is the object of choice; who is given preference
chosen
choosing
that field and living happy
life
now. If guardians forced
childeren
a young person of either sex
children
to
uninstrested
not having or showing interest
uninterested
path. Students cannot able to study properly in that and their particular stream
.
Accept space
.
Which will
effect
have an effect upon
affect
child
life
.
In
contrast they
Accept comma addition
contrast, they
will be some
childeren
a young person of either sex
children
who want to go on bad way and who are unsuccessful in their
selective
Suggestion
selected
select
field
also
. For them
wellwishers
someone who shares your feelings or opinions and hopes that you will be successful
well-wishers
have the
right
to advise and pressure to take particular profession.
some
Suggestion
Some
youth
wonot
feel or have a desire for; want strongly
want
won't
listen
Suggestion
to listen
to
this
advices
Suggestion
advice
and spoil their
life
.
As a result
all age people have their own freedom to choose about
studys
be a student; follow a course of study; be enrolled at an institute of learning
studies
study
according to their
intrest
a sense of concern with and curiosity about someone or something
interest
interests
.If
their
in or at that place
there
cannot and spoiling their
life
parents have the
right
to tell him what is good and what is wrong So parents need to leave their child freely and from back need to
examin
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
examine
whether they are going in
right
path
are
introduces an alternative
or
not.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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