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Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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A section of society has been observed to consume only vegetarian
food
 because they believe it to be good for the body and the earth. In my opinion, it is a personal choice to eat a vegetarian
diet
;
however
, a person cannot stay healthy or save the planet by restricting the
non-vegetarian
diet
.
To begin
 with, the foremost reason that proves the
non-vegetarian
food
 healthy is the availability of certain essential nutrients which are present only in animal meat or seafood.
Additionally
, there should be a variety of
food
, so that the body gets all the essential elements to stay fit and healthy.
For example
, if a person just relies on
plants
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plants, then
then
 he would become deficient in vitamin B, which can be obtained only from animals.
Similarly
, the
sea-
edible fish (broadly including freshwater fish) or shellfish or roe etc
seafood
food
 provides Omega-3 which is present only in fish.
Thus
,
food
 derived from animals is equally important for maintaining good health. Another reason for not restricting the
non-vegetarian
food
 is it balances the ecosystem. Admittedly, if animals like goats and sheep are not consumed by
mankind
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mankind, then
then
 it may happen that their number grows drastically and may create a problem in the environment.
As a result
, it is proper to consume
non-vegetarian
food
 along with vegetarian meals, which will keep their numbers in check. In conclusion, I pen
down saying
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down, saying
 that one should have a variety of
food
 types in
diet
Suggestion
the diet
 and should not restrict himself to just vegetarian
food
. The
food
 from land and sea animals certainly is beneficial to overall health and eating just fruits and plants would make the body weak and deficient in essential vitamins.
Moreover
, the
food
 chain and ecosystem can
also
 be managed effectively if we include meat and fish in our
diet
.
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