Nowadays more and more teenagers take a gap year before entering university. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent years, taking a year off has become a prevalent and publicly recognised phenomenon. Whether the advantages of
this
outweigh the drawbacks is still a debatable question and in my opinion, the answer depends on the activities students get involved in. In case high school graduates spend
this
time
travelling and working, the benefits would be far more important. By taking trips to other countries and having part-
time
jobs, these young adults can be exposed to different cultures and lifestyles and earn their own livelihood. Thanks to
such
social understanding and source of income, they would be more mature, more financially independent and more confident, which may give them a competitive advantage when competing for a job in the future. A case in point is that candidates having wider social knowledge and more confidence are more likely to be employed by big multinational
corporates
of or belonging to a corporation
corporate
than those who do not.
Nevertheless
, if these
gappers
someone who visits stores in search of articles to buy
shoppers
golfers
waste the year on meaningless activities, the negative implications will be greater.
Instead
of spending
this
time
travelling, working, or attending social clubs, many of those are reported to be buried in video games and addicted drugs.
This
dissolve
Suggestion
dissolves
lifestyle might lead to other knock-on effects when high school leavers return to education, one of which is that they lack the motivation to study.
Consequently
, they
eill
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
all
soon lag behind peers and have a tendency to drop out of university, which can be detrimental to their future employability/ career prospects. In conclusion,
although
it is disadvantageous to spend
time
on unhealthy hobbies during the gap year, the disadvantages will be surpassed by the advantages if
gappers
someone who plays the game of golf
golfers
shoppers
use
this
time
to travel and work.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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