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More and more people are moving to big cities these days. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of living in a large city.

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In recent years, there are an increasing number of people tending to live in major cities. In my opinion, living in
such
 big cities has both benefits and drawbacks. There are several advantages of
urban lifestyle
Suggestion
an urban lifestyle
.
Firstly
, citizens have access to better education. There are a huge number of prestigious universities which offer a wide range of academic and vocational course. Students can choose the courses that
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 their potential and future career.
Secondly
, inhabitants have better job opportunities. People in my hometown usually work in restaurants, resorts and coffee shops. City dwellers,
on the other hand
, can work as engineers or architects at industrial
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
.
In addition
, people can work
at
Suggestion
in
 international companies and corporations to get a higher salary and faster promotion.
Lastly
, residents can enjoy endless entertainment activities. Just getting outside, they immediately encounter various street festivals, cinemas, and shopping malls. Living in the city, you will never get bored. Residing in big
cities
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cities has also
also
 has some disadvantages.
To begin
 with, people tend to be under tremendous pressure and stress. They are always up to their ears with workload and have less time to relax.
Also
, a higher cost of living drives them crazy when balancing the budgets. Another issue is
pollution
, especially air
pollution
 and noise
pollution
. Not only high
pollution
density but
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density, but
also
 high volumes of traffic are significant contributors to increasing emission and noisiness.
This
 seriously affects people's health and harms the environment.
Last
 but not least, big-city life often lacks safety.
In other words
, big cities tend to have higher rates of crime due to poverty can density.
Thus
, it is really hard to control crimes and social evils in
such
 a complex society. In a word, living in big cities has great
benefits but
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benefits, but
also
 some significant shortcomings. As far as I am concerned, it is crucial to learn how to adapt to our living environment,
make
Suggestion
makes
 use of the pros and avoid the cons of big-city life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cost of living
  • public transportation
  • pollution
  • congestion
  • social isolation
  • cultural amenities
  • job market
  • healthcare facilities
  • educational institutions
  • crime rate
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