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Developments in technology have brought various environmental problems. Some believe that people need to live simpler lives to solve environmental problems. Others, however, believe technology is the way to solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Technological improvement
has been having
Suggestion
has had
 negative impacts on the environment.
Although
 living in a simple life can tackle environmental issues, I would argue that
technology
 can be the answer to flow these problems. On the one hand, when enjoying life is not entirely dependent on sophisticated
technology
, it will solve the problems of the environment.
firstly
Suggestion
Firstly
, we will reduce greenhouse
gases
Suggestion
gas
 emissions if every household or business does not overuse large power consumption devices
such
 as microwave ovens, air conditioner or lighting equipment.
Secondly
,
instead
 of abusing agricultural pesticides that are harmful to the environment, a farmer can
use
 predator that would control pests by eating them.
On the other hand
, I agree that
technology
 development
has been bringing
Suggestion
has brought
 enormous benefits to the ecosystem. The
first
 benefit is that we can
use
 renewable and environmentally friendly natural sources
such
 as wind, solar or tidal power. It replaces the
use
 of fossil fuels that emit many harmful gases. The
second
 benefit is that we can leverage
technology
 to recycle garbage for many different purposes.
For example
, we can recycle organic waste like vegetables, tubers, fruits or leftovers to make fertilizers for crops. In conclusion,
although
 limiting the
use
 of
technology
 can solve some environmental problems, but according to my observation,
technology
 has been applied a lot to solve
environmentally problem
Suggestion
environmental problems
environmental problem
an environmental problem
the environmental problem
.
Accept space
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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