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Universities should be concerned with educating people so that they have wide general knowledge and be able to , consider important matters from an informed viewpoint, and not simply prepare students for jobs required by society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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The chief function of universities is to educate students for the demands of complex jobs in the labour market. The skills required,
however
, can be narrow and relevant to a particular profession,
such
 as mechanical engineering, medicine, accounting and law. Other skills can be more generic,
such
 as those required by managers, journalists and designers. Some members of society ask for more that universities impart wide general knowledge. It is an age-old complaint that the younger generation is ignorant. The education system and high school curriculum are often blamed. These complaints usually focus on certain skills
such
 as mathematics and literacy, as well as general knowledge. The issue of whether it is society’s responsibility or that of the individual and family to teach keyboard skills, driving or finance and money management, needs to be addressed and resolved. Some universities force their undergraduates to take one subject from the Faculty of Arts and Humanities.
This
 is rather a token gesture. In the American system all university students must complete a general undergraduate degree before being able to proceed to a specialist degree,
such
 as medicine or law at
Graduate School
Suggestion
the Graduate School
. There is much to learn in life and a few years spent at university cannot possibly impart the wide general knowledge society sometimes demands. The importance of education
is
Suggestion
has been
 to teach not just the skills for a particular
profession but
Accept comma addition
profession, but
also
 more generic skills
such
 as logic, organisation, verbal and written communication of complex ideas, and management so that efficient learning can continue through life.
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