In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is this a positive or negative development?

In the technology era, people are able to shop, work and communicate online. From my perspective, while there are a variety of positive aspects
for
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of
this
trend, there are some drawbacks of having less face-to-face contact that need
taking
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to take
into account. On the one hand, the internet comes in handy in many ways. People can communicate with their friends and relatives via social networks
such
as Facebook or Skype by sending a text or even join a group video call. Many
also
use the internet for online shopping since it is time-saving and they can easily compare the prices in different stores.
In addition
, more and more people can work or study from home, which is much more convenient because they can do at hours that suits their own schedule.
This
,
consequently
, would have
improve
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improved
the traffic congestion due to the lower number of vehicles, especially during rush hours.
On the other hand
, several negative aspects of
this
trend should be considered.
Firstly
, friendships which are formed online might not be genuine.
For instance
, the media
carries
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carry
many horror stories of youngsters being incited to commit a crime by their friends who they have met online.
Secondly
, in terms of shopping, it is undoubtedly better to try on clothes before buying, and another disadvantage of online shopping is sometimes delivery might cause damages to the products.
Finally
, personal interaction with work colleagues can easily generate ideas and avoid misunderstandings. In conclusion, while there are obvious benefits of
this
tendency, there are
also
aspects of face-to-face contact which would be a shame to lose.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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