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As computers are being used more and more in education, there will be soon no role for teachers in the classroom.

#computers #education #role #teachers #classroom
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It is true that the use of computers
have been growing
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has been growing
 in popularity. While some people believe that computers will eventually replace the role of teachers in the classroom, I would argue that real teachers still play an integral part in the education of children. On the one hand, there are two primary reasons why computers have now been more and more popular in the field of education.
Firstly
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, with the assistance of computers, a wide range of difficult lessons
have come
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has come
 easier for students to comprehend.
For example
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, complicated definitions of some theories in
maths
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math
 courses can be explained by the detailed illustrations presented on the computer screen with the help of a slide projector.
As a result
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, school students find it less complex to
obsord
become imbued
absorb
 the knowledges passed on from the computers.
Secondly
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, it is essential for students to acquire information technology and computer skills in order to get a high- paying job in the future. It is necessary for them to start learning how to use computers at an early young age.
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, schools need to adopt the usage of computers in the curriculum system.
On the other hand
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, it seems to me that despite the vast benefits of computers
in
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to
 assisting the knowledge acquisition of students, human teachers can not be replaced with the intelligent machines because of various reasons. One reason is that young students are usually ignorant about the different functions and features of computers, so that it seems impossible for them to study without the teacher's guidance.
For instance
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, students from kindergarten and primary schools could not familiarize themselves with computers in the early stages of their learning journey, which seems like that only real teachers are capable of helping them to study effectively. The
second
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 reason is that it is evident that few students have self-discipline. Most of them are easily distracted when leaning with computers because they could not resist the temptation of
attactiveness
the quality of arousing interest; being attractive or something that attracts
attractiveness
 of computer games. As a consequence, they would abandon academic studies for the sake of these interesting games. In conclusion, I concur with those who
agree the view that
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agree with the view that
 it is impractical for computers to replace the role of teachers at school
in spire
heighten or intensify
inspire
in spite
 of the undeniable benefits of computers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital learning
  • Personalized guidance
  • Blended learning
  • Remote education
  • Emotional intelligence
  • Human interaction
  • Cultural dimension
  • Mentorship
  • Critical thinking
  • Educational technology
  • Learning outcomes
  • Role model
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