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Most countries allow 18 years olds to star driving a car. Some say it is good to allow it at this age, while others think that the age to start driving should be at least 25. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Most nations enable youngsters to start driving a car. Some agree
this
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 action at
age
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 18. Others,
however
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, supposed that starting driving at least 25 is just acceptable. In my opinion, I agree with those who consider 18 year olds had better wait until
age
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 18 to travel by car. The essay will discuss both views and my perspective for
this
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. In terms of the minimum driving
age
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 permitted, there are many appropriate reasons that support the
age
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 18.
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, 18-year-old people, who are acknowledged as being biologically mature, need to lead an independent life and join in a wide range of legal rights of proper
grown-ups
a fully developed person from maturity onward
grownups
grown-up
 like casting a vote, getting married, etc.
and
Suggestion
And
obtaning
come into possession of
obtaining
obtain
 a driving
liscense
authorize officially
license
licence
also
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 is no exception.
Second
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, it is the best
time
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 for
aldonescence
the time period between the beginning of puberty and adulthood
adolescence
 to learn a life-saving skill since they have more spare
time
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 than fully mature people, and they yet spend
time
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 attending in universities.
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, younger people's brains have optimal
ablility
the quality of being able to perform; a quality that permits or facilitates achievement or accomplishment
ability
 of gaining new knowledge and proficiency in driving more quickly, which is one of the most vital soft skills.
Last
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 but not least, most countries in
European
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Europe
 and Asian areas
also
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 make the
age
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 18 as a landmark to allow commuting by own vehicles, which accidentally make citizens the same prejudice in relation to the approved driving
age
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. On the flip side, some opinions of the driving
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age which
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age, which
 should limit at least 25 still exist. The
first
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 convincing argument is that adults who were fully mature can calmly deal with many emergency situations
such
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 as flat tyre, died engine on
roads
Suggestion
the roads
; meanwhile juveniles will tend to be panic if
this
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 is a case. It is
also
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 defended that teenagers passionate about the speed and they try to act cool as if they were men or women, and they have less experience than adults, so they are more likely to take risks on driving. Statistics were shown that 50% of people between 18 and 20 made accidents on public streets. 18 year olds,
furthermore
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, who
are still attending
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is still attending
 in universities, should make use of
time
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 to concentrate on studying rather than doing other things.
Personally I
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Personally, I
 definitely approve arguments previously mentioned that governments should enforce a new law for the driving
age
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 at 25. In collusion, there are many different aspects of the permissible driving
age
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. It is
irrifutable
impossible to deny or disprove
irrefutable
 that people in most nations
worldwide usually
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worldwide, usually
 choose the
age
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 18 to allow typical driving;
otherwise
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, some considered that using own motors should be moderated and
appoved
established by authority; given authoritative approval
approved
 at least 25. From individual side, I rethink that the
age
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 25 is the most suitable stage for driving because of being proper
grown-ups
Suggestion
grown-up
. If most residents can universally admit driving at 25, catastrophic accidents made by youngsters will be less likely to happen.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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