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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two diagrams below explain a wave-
energy
machine
’s design and the
locations
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location
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 options and their costs.
Overall
, a wave-
energy
machine
 generates
energy
 from sea waves. It utilizes water and air to generate electricity.
In addition
, its location is one of the important factors that affect the result. A wave-
energy
machine
 consists of two chambers, two turbines, and
electricity
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an electricity
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 generator. The first chamber allows water to come inside the machines, the
second
 one
used
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is used
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release
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to release
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 air flow outside the
machine
. The
machine
 utilizes the turbines to split air from water and create
energy
. Despite the
machine
’s mechanism, it is very important to place the
machine
 in a suitable place to get the required output. The machines that
installed
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are installed
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 in
a
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apply
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large waves place
create
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to create
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 high
energy
.
However
, they have high expenses. On the other side,
energy
 generators
which
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apply
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located in a small
waves
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wave
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 position provide low output.
Nevertheless
, their costs are low.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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