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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some people argue that animals should not be treated as products and that they should have the same privileges as humans. Despite
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, others say that animals are necessary to satisfy multiple demands in cooking and experimentation. In my view, society has no right to exploit a living creature against its will.
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 with, An outstanding amount of people have animals as pets and treat them as family members on a daily basis.
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, a canine needs to be fed, educated, and shown affection. If it is wounded, it needs to be taken to the vet.
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, it is like a toddler. It is irrational to think about hurting a child or eating somebody else's son. Animals see, feel, and suffer like a person.
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, modern life offers multiple alternatives not to consume meat.
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, some people argue that animals are our property and that label encourages us to do with them whatever we please.
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, we
use
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 parts of their bodies in the things we
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 on a regular basis. To illustrate, the jelly beans are made with
bones
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the bones
 of cows, and most of the cookies in the market have animal grease.
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, we
use
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 them for experimentation, as is the case with primates, mice, and whatever creature we think that can be detectable. The industry is annihilating animals, and we do nothing because our well-being could be threatened. What is undoubtedly remarkable is that all animals are
equals
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equal
, and there is no difference between a pet and a cow, they feel and suffer in the same way. In my opinion, we should stop participating in the butchered industry and start to
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 other alternatives. It does not matter if our taste is changed. It is for the welfare of all species that we should preserve.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exploitation
  • Animal welfare
  • Ethical treatment
  • Vegetarianism
  • Veganism
  • Cognitive dissonance
  • Humane
  • Live stock
  • Cruelty-free
  • Bioethics
  • Conservation
  • Habitat preservation
  • Ecosystem
  • Biodiversity
  • Animal testing
  • Synthetic biology
  • Genetic engineering
  • Speciesism
  • Animal husbandry
  • Sustainable farming
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