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People aim to achieve balance between their work and lives. But few people achieve it. What are the causes of the problems? How to over come it?

It is claimed that keeping a
work
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-
life
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 harmony for most people nowadays is just out of
question
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the question
.
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 essay will point out reasons and solutions to
takle
accept as a challenge
tackle
take
 with them. With the intensity of population explosion and the incessant rise of
market economy
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the market economy
a market economy
market economies
, most people seem to trap with the race to meet the social norm.
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, to
accomodate
be agreeable or acceptable to
accommodate
 the desire of possessing certain valued properties
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 as housing, cars, facilities, an individual has to
work
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 harder for financial gains.
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, for those who after years of making great effort, that
finally
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 climb the ladder of success in their career, they are more likely to be attracted by the glory of the achievements and yearn for a higher self actualization. To
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
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 need, they
invitably
in such a manner as could not be otherwise
inevitably
 become more reachable
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 of
work
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 extension and the increase in
number
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the number
 of related
personels
a human being
persons
, which leads to a
further
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 sacrifice of their
persnonal
concerning or affecting a particular person or his or her private life and personality
personal
life
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 for the exchange of their desirable social recognition. In order to overcome
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 issue, there is no other
ways but
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ways, but
 one’s will to set up a more reasonable timetable and schedule for their daily tasks.
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,
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 of spending
most
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more time
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 in the office, one can register a fitness or meditation class after
work
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 to boost their inner-self.
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, they can
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 maintain some of their hobbies by sharing
those
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these
 with friends and family, especially in the weekends when most companies take
day
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the day
a day
days
 off and
work
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 can be put aside until
next
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 Monday. In case, some people may still blame workloads as the culprit for their
time
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 loss, it is vital that they consult an expert of
time
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managment
the act of managing something
management
 so that they could acknowledge the way to prioritize
such
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 tasks among an agenda. In conclusion, a compromise between material and spiritual
life
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 seems to be very challenging to accomplish due to several reasons belonging to modern
life
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.
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,
time
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arrangment
the thing arranged or agreed to
arrangements
 should be the key to any problems related to our social
life
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.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Work-life balance: the equilibrium between one's job responsibilities and personal life.
  • Overwork: working too hard or for excessive amounts of time.
  • Remote work: working from a location other than the central work office, often from home.
  • Flexible working hours: work hours that are adaptable to suit an employee's needs.
  • Commuting: traveling between one's home and workplace.
  • Digital technology: electronic tools and systems used to generate, store, and process data, often leading to increased connectivity.
  • Disconnect: to detach from technology or work communications, often to establish boundaries.
  • Time management: the ability to use one's time effectively or productively.
  • Prioritize: to determine the order for dealing with tasks according to their importance.
  • Employer support: programs or practices employed by an organization to assist employees in managing work and personal roles.
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