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Would you like to live a long, calm life until 100 years old or would you prefer a shorter life but much more intense. Decide and explain your reasons.

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There are many arguments about people's lifestyle. While many people believe that having a peaceful
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 and longevity may be a good choice, I would argue that quality of
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 counts. There are several reasons why
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 span and tranquility in
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 is preferable to many people. The primary reason is
humans'
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human
 curiosity about the future. People always want to know what will happen in the
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 20 or 30 years. If people have children, they will want to live longer to see the personal development of your own kids.
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human's ability
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the human's ability
 is different from one another, so not all people can tolerate the difficulty of
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. It is justifiable to make sense of why many people want to live in
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 way
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, I would argue that living a short but glorious
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 is much more meaningful. All humans just live once, so it is worth risking all they have. Individuals cannot gain any significant accomplishments in
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 if they do not experience harsh time or dangerous situations. Take myself
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; when I was broke, I learnt many more useful lessons than I had had before.
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,
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the length
 of
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 does not matter if that
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 is useless.
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, John Lennon died at the age of 40, but his
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 was full of glory. His
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 is certainly much more significant than that
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 of people who live until 100 but have no spotlights. In conclusion,
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 a long, tranquil
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 is a dream of many people, I prefer a shorter but more intense
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.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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