children's education is expensive. In some countries, the government pays some or all the costs. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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In several nations, educational fees for children are partly or fully sponsored by the authority. While many people contend that
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is educationally beneficial, I subscribe to the view that its detrimental effects are much more superior. There are a number of
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characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
positives
impacts when the
government
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provides financial support for children's
education
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.
First
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and foremost, the
government
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subsidy may encourage more children to attend school and approach to the adequate
education
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. It is obvious that children are the future of a country,
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, worth an investment.
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, weren't children to have the opportunity to pursue
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education
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an education
, the illiteracy rate may soar, seriously deteriorating the economic growth of a country. The greater support the authority
give
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gives
to
education
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, the better
workforce human
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workforce, human
have in the future.
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, the tuition
feess
a fixed charge for a privilege or for professional services
fees
funded by the
government
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may enable to relieve financial burden falling on parents
concering
with regard or relation to
concerning
concern
educational cost, especially for less affluent families.
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, they would have more money to spend on better nutrition and medical care for their children.
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, when the tuition fees are subsidised by the
government
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, several problems can be anticipated. The main drawback of
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would be that some sectors of the
economy
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economy, such
such
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as
infracstructure
the basic structure or features of a system or organization
infrastructure
or agriculture would be insufficiently invested in. It may
consequently
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inhibit the development of the national
economic
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economy
since the whole national budget has been spent on
education
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to share to burden of school fees. Another disadvantage is that some taxpayers would feel unfair on the grounds that they are childless.
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, as part of their money are used to educate other
people
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peoples
' children, they may have a strong sense of injustice. In conclusion, despite a few beneficial
aspect
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aspects
of
governmetal
relating to or dealing with the affairs or structure of government or politics or the state
governmental
funding
to
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of
education
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, it seems to me that the demerits are
much
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many
more notable.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic disparities
  • government funding
  • educational institutions
  • enhanced quality of education
  • educated workforce
  • boosting the economy
  • dependency
  • bureaucracy
  • innovation
  • flexibility
  • parental involvement
  • financially responsible
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