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children's education is expensive. In some countries, the government pays some or all the costs. Do the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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In several nations, educational fees for children are partly or fully sponsored by the authority. While many people contend that
this
 is educationally beneficial, I subscribe to the view that its detrimental effects are much more superior. There are a number of
possitive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
positives
 impacts when the
government
 provides financial support for children's
education
.
First
 and foremost, the
government
 subsidy may encourage more children to attend school and approach to the adequate
education
. It is obvious that children are the future of a country,
therefore
, worth an investment.
In other words
, weren't children to have the opportunity to pursue
education
Suggestion
an education
, the illiteracy rate may soar, seriously deteriorating the economic growth of a country. The greater support the authority
give
Suggestion
gives
 to
education
, the better
workforce human
Accept comma addition
workforce, human
 have in the future.
Moreover
, the tuition
feess
a fixed charge for a privilege or for professional services
fees
 funded by the
government
 may enable to relieve financial burden falling on parents
concering
with regard or relation to
concerning
concern
 educational cost, especially for less affluent families.
As a result
, they would have more money to spend on better nutrition and medical care for their children.
On the other hand
, when the tuition fees are subsidised by the
government
, several problems can be anticipated. The main drawback of
this
 would be that some sectors of the
economy
Accept comma addition
economy, such
such
 as
infracstructure
the basic structure or features of a system or organization
infrastructure
 or agriculture would be insufficiently invested in. It may
consequently
 inhibit the development of the national
economic
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economy
 since the whole national budget has been spent on
education
 to share to burden of school fees. Another disadvantage is that some taxpayers would feel unfair on the grounds that they are childless.
In other words
, as part of their money are used to educate other
people
Suggestion
peoples
' children, they may have a strong sense of injustice. In conclusion, despite a few beneficial
aspect
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aspects
 of
governmetal
relating to or dealing with the affairs or structure of government or politics or the state
governmental
 funding
to
Suggestion
of
education
, it seems to me that the demerits are
much
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many
 more notable.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • socio-economic disparities
  • government funding
  • educational institutions
  • enhanced quality of education
  • educated workforce
  • boosting the economy
  • dependency
  • bureaucracy
  • innovation
  • flexibility
  • parental involvement
  • financially responsible
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